On Thursday evening I was at my football team dinner when the power in the whole city went out. At first I was a little worried because it was my first time at spa when the power when out so I was just going with the flow. After dinner hour I went to the cafe and that’s when I got use to the fact that all the power in the city was out. Later on that night I went home but I couldn’t make anything to eat so I went to sleep hungry and when I woke up all the lights were back on. When the power was back on I was shock because people were telling me that it was going to be off for a couple of hours.
Your story is good. You just need to but look at the sentences starters so your paragraph is structured better. I don't think this is a 100 words.
ReplyDeleteI liked your story, but you just need to use better grammar.
ReplyDeleteI like your story but you need to check your over again. Before you post it or have a upperclassmen look it over before published.
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